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thalle
Apr 30th, 2005, 09:09 PM
My really good friend has an essay to turn in on monday, and she needs help!

It's her final essay before the summerbreak, therefore her grade for this semester depends a lot on it...
I (and she) would really appreciate it, if anyone would check for grammar mistakes etc! Of course I'll spread reps and all!! If you think its too big, then just a little help is also greatly appreciated!!!!!

Thanks in advance :wavey:

Oversættelse
The Finch family lives in Maycomb. The childrens father is a lawyer, and is defending a black, who is accused of raping a poor white mans daughter. Do you think the novel is uninteresting to read for Danes today? Why should one read about racial prejudice in USA in 1930?

Jeremy Finch.
Jeremy’s Finch pet name is Jem Finch. He is Scout’s older brother, who is four years older than Scout. Jem is intelligent, quieter and more reserved than his sister. He has very high standards and expectations for people. When these expectations are not met, he has a difficult time resolving his feelings. Jem has a magnificent imagination, he has always an idea to what scout, Dill and he could do. Jem trying to be a Gentleman just like his father and will do anything to make his father happy. Jem is a little naive, he thinks that everything ends well, but he learns to understand some of the darker aspects of human nature and justice does not always win. In the novel Jem moves into adolescence and that’s a difficult episode in his life. In the novel Jem develop from a boy to a grown up man. He learn many thing in Tom Robinsons case, he learns that it’s not always the good that win, and even though you know from the beginning you have lost, then must you fight for you rights. Jem has a very important part in the novel. He shows how a boy can use all the things he meet on his way in life, as well as they are bad or good experience.
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Essay
This novel takes place in Maycombe, that’s a little stat in Alabama in 1930. The novel is told by a six years old little girl who name is Scout. She is daughter of the lawyer in the town. Scout and her brother Jem have grown up without a mother, because she died when scout was only two years old, but they have Calpurnia there is their black cook and she help a lot in the house. Jem and Scout are small unrestrained rebellious kids; they perform dramatically plays and play war.
One day Atticus (Scout father) gets a very unpopular case where he defends a black man because he is prosecute for rape on a white woman. After that day the little family life changes forever.
From scout’s eyes, the world and the little town have changed, started to hate, lie and be racists. From Scout eyes we try to understand the fascinating and the absurdly courtroom drama and how it split the people in Maycombe.
Atticus is the father of Scout and Jem. He is a lawyer and an extremely morally upright man who strives to deal with everyone in the greatest fairness. Atticus has an inclination to be a little overly optimistic sometimes, but his unshakable hope and his self-created role as the town do-gooder sustain him. He is old and has many experiences in his backpack.
Atticus has at strong personality, he is the most dominant person in the novel, and he has so many think to give other people. He thinks that black and white people is equal, he wants to show others that white and black people has they same feeling inside, it’s only outside they are a different. Atticus has a drive that could kill a man, because even though he stands alone with his thought about racism, he follows his heart and feelings. He has a huge knowledge to everything, he has a view to everything, and that is also when you talk about upbringing. He can be very tough against his children, but in a good way, he will show them the world, and he will have them to experience with the world and the people in Maycombe, so they can form their ideas how people react different and how people can be strong or weak in different situation. He is a man who take every step with precision, and almost never do anything wrong. He fight for what he wants even though he knows from the beginning that he will lose. Atticus is a true hero, not because he has saved a man, but because he do so many things for other people, and he almost never thing about himself, that’s my option to be a true hero.
The theme in the novel is “not to kill a mockingbird”. The mockingbird represents innocence. Like hunters who kill mockingbirds for sport, people kill innocence, or other people who are innocent, without thinking about what they are doing. Atticus stands firm in his defence of innocence and urges his children not to shoot mockingbirds both literally and figuratively. If you look at the theme in the book in one context its racism, people there hate the black people and look at them and only see degrade people.
“To kill a mockingbird” is a beautiful and humorously, rough and a history from the real life. When a child tells about injustice and prejudice through her normal weekdays, it gives it a fantastic effect and is a masterly way to describe the world on. When a child tells a story there is no secrets, because children have now idea about what’s right or wrong to say.

skanky~skanketta
Apr 30th, 2005, 10:20 PM
Oversættelse
The Finch family lives in Maycomb. The children's father is a lawyer, and is defending a black, who is accused of raping a poor white man's daughter. Do you think the novel is uninteresting to read for Danes today? Why should one read about racial prejudice in USA in 1930?

Jeremy Finch.
Jeremys Finch's pet name is Jem Finch. He is four years older than his brother Scout. Jem is intelligent. He is quieter and more reserved than his sister (name?). He has very high standards and expectations for people. When these expectations are not met, he has a difficult time resolving his feelings. Jem has a magnificent imagination, he always has an idea as to what scout, Dill and he could do. Jem is trying to be a gentleman just like his father and will do anything to make his father happy. Jem is a little naive, he thinks that everything ends well, but he learns to understand some of the darker aspects of human nature and that justice does not always win. In the novel Jem moves into adolescence and that’s a difficult chapter of his life. In the novel Jem develops from a boy to a grown man. He learns many things in Tom Robinson's case, he learns that it’s not always good that wins, and even though you know from the beginning you will lose, you must still fight for your rights. Jem has a very important part in the novel. He shows how a boy can use all the things he meet on his way in life, as well as they are bad or good experience.
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Essay
This novel takes place in Maycombe, that’s a little stat in Alabama in 1930. The novel is told by a six years old little girl who name is Scout. She is daughter of the lawyer in the town. Scout and her brother Jem have grown up without a mother, because she died when scout was only two years old, but they have Calpurnia there is their black cook and she help a lot in the house. Jem and Scout are small unrestrained rebellious kids; they perform dramatically plays and play war.
One day Atticus (Scout father) gets a very unpopular case where he defends a black man because he is prosecute for rape on a white woman. After that day the little family life changes forever.
From scout’s eyes, the world and the little town have changed, started to hate, lie and be racists. From Scout eyes we try to understand the fascinating and the absurdly courtroom drama and how it split the people in Maycombe.
Atticus is the father of Scout and Jem. He is a lawyer and an extremely morally upright man who strives to deal with everyone in the greatest fairness. Atticus has an inclination to be a little overly optimistic sometimes, but his unshakable hope and his self-created role as the town do-gooder sustain him. He is old and has many experiences in his backpack.
Atticus has at strong personality, he is the most dominant person in the novel, and he has so many think to give other people. He thinks that black and white people is equal, he wants to show others that white and black people has they same feeling inside, it’s only outside they are a different. Atticus has a drive that could kill a man, because even though he stands alone with his thought about racism, he follows his heart and feelings. He has a huge knowledge to everything, he has a view to everything, and that is also when you talk about upbringing. He can be very tough against his children, but in a good way, he will show them the world, and he will have them to experience with the world and the people in Maycombe, so they can form their ideas how people react different and how people can be strong or weak in different situation. He is a man who take every step with precision, and almost never do anything wrong. He fight for what he wants even though he knows from the beginning that he will lose. Atticus is a true hero, not because he has saved a man, but because he do so many things for other people, and he almost never thing about himself, that’s my option to be a true hero.
The theme in the novel is “not to kill a mockingbird”. The mockingbird represents innocence. Like hunters who kill mockingbirds for sport, people kill innocence, or other people who are innocent, without thinking about what they are doing. Atticus stands firm in his defence of innocence and urges his children not to shoot mockingbirds both literally and figuratively. If you look at the theme in the book in one context its racism, people there hate the black people and look at them and only see degrade people.
“To kill a mockingbird” is a beautiful and humorously, rough and a history from the real life. When a child tells about injustice and prejudice through her normal weekdays, it gives it a fantastic effect and is a masterly way to describe the world on. When a child tells a story there is no secrets, because children have now idea about what’s right or wrong to say.

OK, I CHANGED THE FIRST PARAGRAPH. ITS A LITTLE LOOSE, YOU NEED TO TIGHTEN IT UP A BIT. THE NAME "JEM" IS REPEATED TO MANY TIMES. TRY TO MAKE IT SOUND CONTINUOS AND FLOWY.

alexusjonesfan
Apr 30th, 2005, 10:41 PM
oh lord how I hated reading that book

This novel takes place in Maycombe, that’s a little stat<city/town?> in Alabama in 1930. The novel is told by a six years old little girl who's name is Scout. She is the daughter of the <possibly 'a'> lawyer in the town. Scout and her brother Jem have grown up without a mother, <comma unecessary> because she died when sScout was only two years old, but they have Calpurnia there <who> is their black cook and she helps a lot in the house. Jem and Scout are small unrestrained rebellious kids; they perform dramatically plays and play war.
One day Atticus (Scout's father) gets a very unpopular case where he defends a black man because he is prosecute for rape who is being prosecuted for raping on a white woman. After that day the little family's life changes forever.
From Sscout’s eyes, the world and the little town have changed, they have started to hate, lie and be racists. From Scout eyes we try to understand the fascinating and the absurdly courtroom drama and how it split the people in Maycombe.
Atticus is the father of Scout and Jem. He is a lawyer and an extremely morally upright man who strives to deal with everyone in with the greatest fairness. Atticus has an inclination to be a little overly optimistic sometimes, but his unshakable hope and his self-created role as the town do-gooder sustain him. He is old and has many experiences in his backpack. <I guess this is a Danish idiom :p>
Atticus has at strong personality, he is the most dominant person in the novel, and he has so many thinkgs to give other people. He thinks that black and white people is are equal, he wants to show others that white and black people hasve they same feeling inside, it’s only outside they are a different. Atticus has a drive that could kill a man, because even though he stands alone with his thought about racism, he follows his heart and feelings. He has a huge lots of knowledge about to everything, he has a view to everything, and that is also when you talk about upbringing. He can be very tough against with his children, but in a good way, he will show them the world, and he will have them to experience with the world and the people in Maycombe, so they can form their ideas how people react different and how people can be strong or weak in different situations. He is a man who takes every step with precision, and almost never does anything wrong. He fights for what he wants even though he knows from the beginning that he will lose. Atticus is a true hero, not because he has saved a man, but because he does so many things for other people, and he almost never thingks about himself, that’s my option <maybe you meant 'opinion on being a true hero'> to be a true hero.
The theme in the novel is “not to kill a mockingbird”. The mockingbird represents innocence. Like hunters who kill mockingbirds for sport, people kill innocence, or other people who are innocent, without thinking about what they are doing. Atticus stands firm in his defence of innocence and urges his children not to shoot mockingbirds both literally and figuratively. If you look at the theme in the book in one context, it's about racism, people there hate the black people and look at them and only see degraded people.
“To kill a mockingbird” is a beautiful and humorously, rough and a history from the real life. When a child tells <'us/the reader'> about injustice and prejudice through her normal weekdays, it gives it a fantastic effect and is a masterly way to describe the world on. When a child tells a story there is are no secrets, because children have now idea about what’s right or wrong to say.


just some suggestions, I'm no english major by any means :p

skanky~skanketta
Apr 30th, 2005, 10:54 PM
oh lord how I hated reading that book

This novel takes place in Maycombe, that’s a little stat<city/town?> in Alabama in 1930. The novel is told by a six years old little girl who's name is Scout. She is the daughter of the <possibly 'a'> lawyer in the town. Scout and her brother Jem have grown up without a mother, <comma unecessary> because she died when sScout was only two years old, but they have Calpurnia there <who> is their black cook and she helps a lot in the house. Jem and Scout are small unrestrained rebellious kids; they perform dramatically plays and play war.
One day Atticus (Scout's father) gets a very unpopular case where he defends a black man because he is prosecute for rape who is being prosecuted for raping on a white woman. After that day the little family's life changes forever.
From Sscout’s eyes, the world and the little town have changed, they have started to hate, lie and be racists. From Scout eyes we try to understand the fascinating and the absurdly courtroom drama and how it split the people in Maycombe.
Atticus is the father of Scout and Jem. He is a lawyer and an extremely morally upright man who strives to deal with everyone in with the greatest fairness. Atticus has an inclination to be a little overly optimistic sometimes, but his unshakable hope and his self-created role as the town do-gooder sustain him. He is old and has many experiences in his backpack. <I guess this is a Danish idiom :p>
Atticus has at strong personality, he is the most dominant person in the novel, and he has so many thinkgs to give other people. He thinks that black and white people is are equal, he wants to show others that white and black people hasve they same feeling inside, it’s only outside they are a different. Atticus has a drive that could kill a man, because even though he stands alone with his thought about racism, he follows his heart and feelings. He has a huge lots of knowledge about to everything, he has a view to everything, and that is also when you talk about upbringing. He can be very tough against with his children, but in a good way, he will show them the world, and he will have them to experience with the world and the people in Maycombe, so they can form their ideas how people react different and how people can be strong or weak in different situations. He is a man who takes every step with precision, and almost never does anything wrong. He fights for what he wants even though he knows from the beginning that he will lose. Atticus is a true hero, not because he has saved a man, but because he does so many things for other people, and he almost never thingks about himself, that’s my option <maybe you meant 'opinion on being a true hero'> to be a true hero.
The theme in the novel is “not to kill a mockingbird”. The mockingbird represents innocence. Like hunters who kill mockingbirds for sport, people kill innocence, or other people who are innocent, without thinking about what they are doing. Atticus stands firm in his defence of innocence and urges his children not to shoot mockingbirds both literally and figuratively. If you look at the theme in the book in one context, it's about racism, people there hate the black people and look at them and only see degraded people.
“To kill a mockingbird” is a beautiful and humorously, rough and a history from the real life. When a child tells <'us/the reader'> about injustice and prejudice through her normal weekdays, it gives it a fantastic effect and is a masterly way to describe the world on. When a child tells a story there is are no secrets, because children have now idea about what’s right or wrong to say.


just some suggestions, I'm no english major by any means :p

what IS your major?

i'm a journalism and mass com major. but i spent my weekend editing 8 articles. i'm pretty tired of it.

alexusjonesfan
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:08 PM
what IS your major?



depends on the year :o was engineering physics, then mech. engineering...now possibly biochem :o

cellophane
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:10 PM
depends on the year :o was engineering physics, then mech. engineering...now possibly biochem :o

At least it's not English. ;)

alexusjonesfan
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:12 PM
At least it's not English. ;)

see me in a year, at this rate it will be English by that point :smash:

cellophane
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:29 PM
see me in a year, at this rate it will be English by that point :smash:

*I* would have to be a masochist to switch to English. ;) On the other hand, maybe it could be more interesting than anything I've done. :lol:

alexusjonesfan
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:39 PM
*I* would have to be a masochist to switch to English. ;) On the other hand, maybe it could be more interesting than anything I've done. :lol:

what, law not interesting?! :p

I *was* a masochist by picking math intensive stuff :o

cellophane
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:47 PM
what, law not interesting?! :p

Frankly, I dunno anymore. :scared: It's interesting, but I'm getting scared by everybody who keep saying that law school is hell, and they hate being a lawyer, because it's so fucking mundane. I don't even like lawyers (who does???), and I am really not sure I want to be one as a result. :lol:

cellophane
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:48 PM
I *was* a masochist by picking math intensive stuff :o

So was I, but I'm not doing that anymore. :p ;)

alexusjonesfan
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:50 PM
yay for not knowing where to go in life :banana:

cellophane
Apr 30th, 2005, 11:53 PM
yay for not knowing where to go in life :banana:

Listening to music all day would be a good job. ;) Who will pay me? :sad: Well, maybe I'd get tired of that too.

skanky~skanketta
May 1st, 2005, 12:08 AM
depends on the year :o was engineering physics, then mech. engineering...now possibly biochem :o

lol!i thought i was bad...premed, public relations, psychology, and finally mass com and journalism. my dad put his foot down and i freaked. my mom still hasn't forgiven me for turning my back on medicine :rolleyes: in her home country india no less. :tape: you know how indian parents are :rolleyes:

and now i want to get into law once i'm i get my degree (in some 5 weeks!) :eek: :bolt:

skanky~skanketta
May 1st, 2005, 12:12 AM
Frankly, I dunno anymore. :scared: It's interesting, but I'm getting scared by everybody who keep saying that law school is hell, and they hate being a lawyer, because it's so fucking mundane. I don't even like lawyers (who does???), and I am really not sure I want to be one as a result. :lol:

OMG!i would kill to do law!u're lucky. my parents refused to pay if i did it. apparently malaysia has too many lawyers and i wont get a job and its a "bad" profession. whatever. i say go for it. i wanna be a lawyer so bad....so i can strut into court with my micro minis ala ally mcbeal!:lol:

lol, no, but i wanna make big bucks.and its probably one job where i ouldn't have to sleep my way up to the top.(unless i wanna be made partner or something....:unsure:

alexusjonesfan
May 1st, 2005, 12:19 AM
lol!i thought i was bad...premed, public relations, psychology, and finally mass com and journalism. my dad put his foot down and i freaked. my mom still hasn't forgiven me for turning my back on medicine :rolleyes: in her home country india no less. :tape: you know how indian parents are :rolleyes:

and now i want to get into law once i'm i get my degree (in some 5 weeks!) :eek: :bolt:

omg, was this in Manipal? that school near Mangalore I think in India. My parents really really wanted me to go after one of my close friends decided to go there (he did a year of forensics, decided he'd get paid more in medicine and off he went). My parents already have upsetting news on the way but I think they finally see now that me trying to do engineering as a prep for med school was not the greatest of ideas :o

alexusjonesfan
May 1st, 2005, 12:21 AM
Listening to music all day would be a good job. ;) Who will pay me? :sad: Well, maybe I'd get tired of that too.

well that actually fits a job description: music journalist. My talents are doing things for 5 minutes then getting bored...that fits no job :p

RVD
May 1st, 2005, 12:30 AM
My really good friend has an essay to turn in on monday, and she needs help!

It's her final essay before the summerbreak, therefore her grade for this semester depends a lot on it...
I (and she) would really appreciate it, if anyone would check for grammar mistakes etc! Of course I'll spread reps and all!! If you think its too big, then just a little help is also greatly appreciated!!!!!

Thanks in advance :wavey:It looks as if name_change has it all under control. :) My correction is a bit different, so if you want to check it out, I'd be more than happy to PM it to you. I have to go out for a few hours though. If I see a PM, I'll know you're interested. If not, good luck and I hope you get an 'A', or whatever the maximum grade is there. :wavey:

cellophane
May 1st, 2005, 01:12 AM
lol!i thought i was bad...premed, public relations, psychology, and finally mass com and journalism. my dad put his foot down and i freaked. my mom still hasn't forgiven me for turning my back on medicine :rolleyes: in her home country india no less. :tape: you know how indian parents are :rolleyes:

and now i want to get into law once i'm i get my degree (in some 5 weeks!) :eek: :bolt:

My parents still don't know I had a part-time course load at school this term. :tape: :bolt:I'm not telling them until (IF!) I get into law school. :tape:

cellophane
May 1st, 2005, 01:18 AM
OMG!i would kill to do law!u're lucky. my parents refused to pay if i did it. apparently malaysia has too many lawyers and i wont get a job and its a "bad" profession. whatever. i say go for it. i wanna be a lawyer so bad....so i can strut into court with my micro minis ala ally mcbeal!:lol:

I think I'd be scared of court. :scared: Plus, working in a corporate law firm, I don't think you get to spend a lot of time in court anyway - what I've heard from lawyers who came to my school to talk about law school. I NEED good grades; I don't even know if I can make it. I've never wanted to work hard. :o

cellophane
May 1st, 2005, 01:24 AM
well that actually fits a job description: music journalist. My talents are doing things for 5 minutes then getting bored...that fits no job :p

I didn't say I want to write about music. :p Well, actually I wouldn't mind, but I'm afraid I don't have good enough writing skills / don't use words like 'lugubrious' in my vocabulary. Plus, still nobody would pay me. ;)

I get bored when I have tons of time - the minute I am in school, I start getting interested in other things. ;) Well, actually, I am permanently bored through it all. :lol:

jbone_0307
May 1st, 2005, 01:53 AM
[QUOTE=Aria Rose]My really good friend has an essay to turn in on monday, and she needs help!

It's her final essay before the summerbreak, therefore her grade for this semester depends a lot on it...
I (and she) would really appreciate it, if anyone would check for grammar mistakes etc! Of course I'll spread reps and all!! If you think its too big, then just a little help is also greatly appreciated!!!!!

Thanks in advance :wavey:

Oversættelse
The Finch family lives in Maycomb. The children's father is a lawyer and is defending a black, who is accused of raping the daughter of a poor white man. Do you think the novel is uninteresting to read for Danes' today? Why should one read about racial prejudice in the USA in the 1930s?

Jeremy Finch.
Jeremy Finchs' pet name is Jem Finch. Jeremy is four years older than Scout. He is more quiet and reserved than his sister. Jem is intelligent, he has very high standards and expectations for people. When these expectations are not met, he has a difficult time resolving his feelings. Jem has a magnificent imagination and always has ideas and games that keep them entertained. Jem trying to be a Gentleman just like his father and will do anything to make his father happy. Jem is sometimes naive in that he thinks everything will end well, but throughout the novel, he learns about the darker aspects of human nature and that justice does not always prevail. In the novel, he develops from a boy to an adult. Jem learns many things in Tom Robinson's case. He learns that the good will not always win and to fight for what you believe in, until the end. Jem has a very important part in the novel.



I hate proofreading, so I've only done this part. I may do the rest later. Most of the sentences I deleted were because I didn't understand what you were trying to get across.

thalle
May 1st, 2005, 08:29 PM
Thank you all for the help. Both me and my friend are thankful for it!! Its really good to know people will help here!
Thanks all:kiss:

(Vero, can't rep you yet:():kiss:

controlfreak
May 1st, 2005, 11:36 PM
Aren't you a little short for a Stormtrooper essay?