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I need help with something.

I am writing a persuasive essay on high school dropouts and I would like any input. I have a 69 in the class and i need a 70 to pass. Its extra credit so it could help a lot. It has to have 'loaded language'....


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Re: I need help with something.

well yah might wanna use something about not having people pushing them to do better,obviously drugs could come into play, the parents, the friends they hang out with.
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thanks...i have to persuade on my opinion that you shouldnt drop out...

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write it and post it here. Then we can critique what you have done.
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well i havent started but i am going to finish it and will be up tomorrow

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reasons against:
1. The make significantly less money than people with college degrees or even just a high school diploma
2. more likely to be incarcerated
3. worse health
4. more likely to be single parents
5. more likely to be unemployed

now you have to go and find the statistics to back that up but a quick google search shows it is there.
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What is "loaded language"?
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What is "loaded language"?
big words and complete sentences lol
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Re: I need help with something.

you should write about how if you don't get a good grade on the paper that your chances of becoming a high school dropout yourself increases

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You should write that Gay sex stimulates more muscles than Heterosexual sex and its been proven that people who are more stimulated get better grades.

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I don't mean to be harsh, but for me education is important. I know that you have asked for advice here on other subjects, as well. It seems to me that in order to improve your grades, you need to start studying more and coming up with your own ideas. Rather than asking for answers, you could ask your teacher for help, get a tudor, talk with friends, or even search the internet for information...and by information I don't mean having others tell you the answer, I mean look for what has already been written/discussed/articles so you can create a "persuasive" essay from your your own point of view."

If you continue to ask others for the answers then you will never improve. I'm not trying to be rude with you, just trying to give you real help.







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I am writing a persuasive essay on high school dropouts and I would like any input. I have a 69 in the class and i need a 70 to pass. Its extra credit so it could help a lot. It has to have 'loaded language'....


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why didnt I think of that

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I don't mean to be harsh, but for me education is important. I know that you have asked for advice here on other subjects, as well. It seems to me that in order to improve your grades, you need to start studying more and coming up with your own ideas. Rather than asking for answers, you could ask your teacher for help, get a tudor, talk with friends, or even search the internet for information...and by information I don't mean having others tell you the answer, I mean look for what has already been written/discussed/articles so you can create a "persuasive" essay from your your own point of view."

If you continue to ask others for the answers then you will never improve. I'm not trying to be rude with you, just trying to give you real help.
I completely agree. It looks like you are just trying to find the easy way out.
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I think school is shit.

Please write that in your report. Top marks.


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